would be a very good story. Dialouge would be much better, but the story is good.«12» Story appears to have been swiped and redone from a decade ols paper back from the gaylord Adult Store in the 50’sREADERReport 2007-01-25 20:07:00give more descripton of girl, but don lissen 2 thos fags 8/10READERReport 2007-01-19 17:08:48this sucksREADERReport 2007-01-19 01:11:18I agree with the other comment. Hindi XXX 6 comments«12»READERReport 2007-09-18 11:39:32why not use the usual description and why try to use 3rd person? 6 comments«12»READERReport 2007-09-18 11:39:32why not use the usual description and why try to use 3rd person? would be a very good story. I rate this 4.READERReport 2007-02-27 18:50:35You don’t deserve to represent yourself as a Michigander, I thought we threw all you assholes out in 43. I rate this 4.READERReport 2007-02-27 18:50:35You don’t deserve to represent yourself as a Michigander,
