It could be a lot better. Porn You need to kill him off and let her find her mother.«12» It’s not a great tale of sex and adventure. 6.5/10READERReport 2007-02-17 01:36:06There is such a thing as a spell checker…USE IT!!! Keep it up and please continueREADERReport 2007-02-17 06:05:20Let’s face it, and I’m not being mean to the author: This is a very average story. It could be a lot better. 8 comments«12»READERReport 2007-06-12 13:02:38Go Marines! One request–please “don’t take the girl.”READERReport 2007-02-17 21:43:25hey i loved it ! And to the commenter named Zatch2, it’s not “Definatley, it’s “Definitely.” Learn how to spell before sounding like a writers critic.READERReport 2007-02-17 04:33:43Definatley needs a conclusion. Go Cowboys! Everything sounded good until the Chase character ended up being a sadistic rapist and killer. 8 comments«12»READERReport 2007-06-12 13:02:38Go Marines! You’re doing
