Don’t give up, you may want to rewrite this story and see if the comments improve.anonymous readerReport 2011-04-07 08:34:59F-ING amazing. tnaflix I didn’t care about the paragraph breaks. I didn’t care about the paragraph breaks. I read it through all the way. Read the story yourself and I am sure you will understand what I and others are telling you. I read it through all the way. Do you remember English class in school, grammar was a huge part and is needed to make your readers understand what you are trying to portray.It may take longer to write, but it makes a better story to read.
