Interesting premise, but you need to proof read and edit spelling and grammar as it is barely legible. Re-write it, keeping the narrative arc in mind, and then proof read it (out loud) to edit out the errors. Xvideos Use a dictionary and a thesaurus to avoid homonyms, repetition of words/phrases and spelling errors. is that some sort of flatulence?anonymous readerReport 2012-03-31 10:00:02Too short for the style of story. 3 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2012-10-18 22:56:44I’m giggling at jiggling asses!YianoReport 2012-03-31 20:02:19I didn’t know asses could giggle… Don’t give up.«1» Interesting premise, but you need to proof read and edit spelling and grammar as it is barely legible. Re-write it, keeping the narrative arc in mind, and then proof read it (out loud) to edit out the errors.
